Wednesday, August 5, 2020

WIP Wednesday - Anatomy of a Scene Outline for Clans of Europa: Tina



Most know I'm not a pantser--someone who writes 'by the seat of her pants'. I'm a dedicated plotter. I outline. Vigorously. In fact, it's been argued my outlines are more on the order of first drafts. Which perhaps they are. They are quite detailed.

What follows is a typical outline of a scene. This is an early one in Tina, coming out late this year.

Stage Setup: spyship

               Time/place: night at convent/bridge

               Temp/season: comfortably cool for Kalquorians/na

               Lighting: good overall lighting, excellent task lighting, colored indicators on control panels

               Sounds: hum of engines, small beeps and buzzes, low conversation, light footsteps

               Smells: Kalquorian musk, an ozone-ish electric scent

               Props: Control podiums with computers, Tukui mans navigation, holo-vid screen

               Symbols/images: Tranis’s slight disapproval of Tukui—due to his impetuous nature

Characters: Tukui, Simdow, Tranis, others on bridge

Dialogue and action:

               (Tukui tries to look busier than he is, though with the spyship in orbit, there isn’t presently much for him to do, all the action is on the small moon below, yet with the captain on the holo-vid speaking to the first officer, he doesn’t want to attract Tranis’s attention for the wrong reasons, he’s done more than his share of that in his short career on the spyship, he listens closely however, ever since hearing there were women on the moon, every man on the ship has been eager for information, he wishes it was he who had gone to the colony instead of Osopa, his Nobek had better be ready with details about the place, if his taciturn clanmate dares to offer no more than generalizations he’ll—; Tukui’s head snaps up, did the captain just say the full clans on board would get their choice of Matara? Tranis notes the sudden interest from his navigator and visibly winces) T- Of course, if any clan doesn’t feel they can shoulder the responsibility—the heavy responsibility of caring for a Matara—they need not claim one. (Tukui’s mind is racing despite it being obvious Tranis was speaking for his benefit, a Matara? For his clan with only the first hints of growing rank? Of course he can handle such, all it takes is doting on her and telling her how wonderful she is, as his fathers have always treated his mother, a female lifemate! He wonders if Osopa has seen anyone likely and again chafes that he’s not down there to evaluate them for himself) T- Simdow, make sure when you pass the news along that you tell prospective clans to consider this opportunity with the greatest gravity. To consider all the changes having a lifebringer will make to every facet of their existence. (Tranis’s gaze again flicks to Tukui as Simdow acknowledges, meanwhile Tukui sends a message on the sly to Osopa to contact him asap)

Exit line: I realize you have a lot going on, but com as soon as possible, my Nobek.

POV: Tukui

Conflict: Tranis obviously doesn’t think Tukui is ready for a Matara

+/-: Tukui’s clan to get a Matara/he can’t pick one out yet

Climax: Tukui over the moon to discover he can claim a Matara, not considering all it entails